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Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

0 posted 1999-08-13 09:14 AM

DARKNESS

Darkness is a river,
It carries me away.
Lost in isolation,
I watch my soul slowly decay.
Teased by a subtle numbness,
My brain through silence screams
Across the unconscious border
Of reality and dreams.

Stars in twilight twinkle
Across the witless skies.
The hands of heaven sprinkle
Seeds of hope before blind eyes.
Till the sun, in relished power,
Hides all in the hell of day,
And glory rises in the shadows
Of illusion and disarray.

Ambiguity corrupts the masses,
Subdues our every thought.
Lifeless veins are empty
In corpses that dare not rot.
Driven on by fear, by hopelessness,
And sheltered by the past,
We grip life through dead memories,
Forcing the love to last.

Till sorrow overcomes us
In clouds of obscurity,
Till tomorrow has vanished
With innocence and purity,
Vanity's proclamation,
(Come like the clarion of Hate),
All that's left is death,
And still you have to wait.

Emptiness, an aching chasm,
Unadorned to Time,
The pining of the spirit
To an unrecognized chime,
The decrepit embrace of Destiny,
Passion, an uncried tear.
A droplet of water, a river run still,
The darkness that holds me here.

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

1 posted 1999-08-13 09:22 AM

This flowed very nicely. Well done!

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 1999-08-13 09:23 AM

Perfection in poetry! I love this one.

angel girl
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since 1999-07-23

Posts 322
within a whisper...

3 posted 1999-08-13 09:29 AM

Wonderful. I loved it.

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One touch of nature makes the whole world kin.
-William Shakespeare

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 1999-08-13 09:44 AM

Awesome, as usual....

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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

5 posted 1999-08-13 10:22 AM

I'd like to know when the tourbus leaves for that tour inside your head !! I'll even buy extra tickets! I absolutely love you work - fabulous adventures, they are...gives my mental motor a little kick-start.

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 1999-08-13 10:55 AM

Michael, each stanza could be a poem in itself. You are a gifted poet and make me feel very humble.

Ron

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-05-19

Posts 8669
Michigan, US

7 posted 1999-08-13 06:25 PM

A fascinating metaphor, brought to life with your usual poetic dexterity.

But might I suggest the metaphor could be carried farther? Does not every river, after all, have a bank from which we can choose to disembark?