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Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 1999-08-11 10:52 PM

The softness of her flowing hair
deceived many a fighting mortal.
Her womanly curves displayed before
her waiting feminine portal.

Men would tremble seeing her
astride a steed so wild
many thought he could win her heart
by being soft and mild.

But she was a warrior woman
brave and strong and true
no mere man would win her heart
no matter what he would do.

She slew as many enemies
as any manly horde
and fended off every aggressive charge
with her unyielding Spartan sword.

[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 08-11-99).]

Artur Hawkwing
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since 1999-06-30

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1 posted 1999-08-11 11:11 PM

wow, well, yanno? You've just given me the ticket to motivation... now I think I'm going to pick up a quill and write a poem based on Birgitte, the archer with a silver bow who never missed a target.

The warrior archer, actually! sounds like we have a duel here... no, actually our heroines on strings do ... which means we play them like puppets as they stab at each other.

I really love this, but I'm working on Ulysses right now.

I could've sworn this is a very masterful poem. It really warms my heart, since I have this deep involvement with fantasy, myths, legends, etc... please, can I add this to my favorite collection?

[This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 08-11-99).]

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

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In the space between moments

2 posted 1999-08-11 11:12 PM

Wonderful...this reminds me of my best friend, the strong, womanly warrior. I truly enjoyed this.

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*Krista Knutson*

"Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy

Nan

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 1999-08-12 08:59 AM

June Cleaver she's not -

Women just don't seem to fit the same mold as times gone by, ya know??
Well done, deVine.....

ac
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since 1999-06-17

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Cayey, PR - USA

4 posted 1999-08-12 09:13 AM

For those of us who are not there yet...this is what we should aspire to be...brave and strong and true...well-written...

[This message has been edited by ac (edited 08-12-99).]

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

5 posted 1999-08-12 08:47 PM

Thank you all. By the way, I'm looking for a graphic to go with this one...any ideas?

Craig
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since 1999-06-10

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6 posted 1999-08-12 08:48 PM

How about a picture of you.

Christopher

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Purgatorial Incarceration

7 posted 1999-08-12 09:01 PM

vun-da-bah deVine!
I love the last line (and title) it's a powerful phrase, to fit the description of a powerful woman!

BRAVO!

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Where did I go wrong, I never needed this before,
I need a woman, to help me feel.
-Live-

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

8 posted 1999-08-12 09:10 PM

Well written, well meaning, well done.

Balladeer

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9 posted 1999-08-12 10:13 PM

My ex-wife thanks you for immortalizing her with this poem. Strongly written, deVine one.

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

10 posted 1999-08-13 01:43 AM

This was the result of a challenge: use the phrase: unyielding Spartan sword... Thank you again...

Balladeer, your ex sends her love from Spartanburg...

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