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Open Poetry #1

read this and tell me what you think

hodge
New Member

since 1999-06-21

Posts 9
Shannon, IL 61078

0 posted 1999-08-09 04:36 PM

Life
By:Jeremy Rogers

Life is a sparkling flower,
Flowing with colors from the rainbow of God,
Shinning with the rays of a summer sun,
But someday that flower must wither away

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Jeremy Rogers

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

1 posted 1999-08-09 05:19 PM

for constructive criticism, you may want to post this is the "critical analysis" forum...Welcome hodge

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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...your countenance...eight short weeks...My One and Only...Music to my Ears...hoarse whispers...just watching tv...break my heart...are you ready?...Feel the need?...serving wench...Tribute to M.J....take a guess...sink or swim...stolen hours...the mistress...Perfection...a little girl...Mr. Jones...life is like...insomnia
...devotion...too soon...07-20-69...craving...Master...chat?...apart...plain...hush...then...vice...shameless self promotion

hodge
New Member

since 1999-06-21

Posts 9
Shannon, IL 61078

2 posted 1999-08-09 05:46 PM

thank you i will do that

RainbowGirl
Member Elite

since 1999-07-31

Posts 3023
United Kingdom

3 posted 1999-08-09 06:53 PM

What happens when the flower has withered?

All flowers give off beauty either in petals, smell or radiance, the way they turn their heads towards the sun..:-))

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

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