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Swollen Emotions |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
When you feel emotion well up in your eyes Don't try to hold it back, let out a good cry Never shy or look away just look in to their eyes For its a part of our emotion that tears fall from our eyes Don't ever try to change you, don't ever hold it back Holding back to someone, is giving up the slack Just place your arms around it, and never feel your weak Tears are only weakness if you don't let them speak So let the rain fall on now, tomorrow they may be dry Get your self a cucumber place slices on your eyes And do not shy away from letting people see Cause eyes all, red and swollen, are flags of tears set free The next time you see someone with eye's all red and puffed Your heart will sink inside you, as you know they've had enough So give the thumbs up to them and offer up a smile For they emptied their emotions, for just a little while They need to feel your with them as every smile you give Will replenish there emotions as they sort it in their head Their eye's will start to clear up the swelling will go down As they will come out victorious, with the breath of peace they've found Tori 1974 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink vlh. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
That peace can sure be elusive... *S* Good poem, tori! |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Didn't mean to baffle you suthern.. just want to point out that tears are very much a part of what we have to say .. so it they are there let them flow...don't try to hide them thinking that by doing so we are braver, smarter or make more since..... and giving a pat on the back to someone who is crying or has cried... letting them know its ok to shed them old tears... they will feel better in the end.... oops guess I didn't put it clearly.. no bother .. I sometimes confuse myself as well..:-) maybe I should re-think this one. ? Thanks for the input.. I'll work in it.. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I don't think you should change it at all. It was very clear. Very truthful. You have done a fantastic job! I loved IT!!! Too many times we try to hold it in. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Awe...Thanks WhtDove.... I wont.. I did enjoy sutherns input .. think was the one baffled by peace..:-) |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Speaking for myself I find crying a particularly difficult thing to do. My boyfriend tries to get me to cry sometimes, when I'm unhappy, just to get it out! Tch tch - how does one cry, when one wants to? I often find that my poetry can be my tears. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
P.S: Great poem! |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Tahnks severn ... How right you are about poetry . its our tears, laughter, and our pain. Works for me anyway:-) |
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ShellBelle Junior Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 11 |
You have quite a refreshing poem here, tori. It's the feeling you get as your washing your face after a good cry. Thanks for such a beautiful reminder for us all.  @-->---- A friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your heart. |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
You are absolutely right, of course, but crying still won't make the pain go away, and sympathy can sometimes make it worse. |
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Cinderella Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 152Arizona |
Boo Hoo.......but I still cannot show my emotions for I want others to think I am strong! I wish I could let out my sadness but who would really care? Wonderful that you can express yourself, some people can and some cannot. |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
This was an excellent piece of work. I;m glad I decided to browse through the archives. |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
This was an excellent piece of work. I;m glad I decided to browse through the archives. |
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