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Broken Promise |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
If a promise be broken then does it become a lie? If a promise kept, does it cause your heart to fly? Give me no promises your heart cannot keep. Ask not that I pray for death when I close my eyes to sleep. Give me truth above all else hard facts are what I need. Promise not that you'll stay for if you leave, my soul will bleed. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Your sincerity continues to shine...... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you...that is best response to any of my poems....  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice one, indeed - deVine...  |
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Perpetua New Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 2Singapore |
It is a really nice poem that helps me to sort things out....as I'm in a problem wif my fren now. ------------------ Frenships last forever and never will end |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Mine heart doth sing with thoughts divine When touched by beauty of her rhyme I feel within each wonderous line The heart and soul of Ms. deVine. [This message has been edited by Tim (edited 06-29-99).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all...I am sitting here at work, in a mire of problems and stress, feeling overworked, overwhelmed and underappreciated. Then I read your responses and my work life seems so unimportant. Thank you! |
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ac Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 129Cayey, PR - USA |
this wonderful...concise and to the point with just the right amount of sincerity and insight... |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
wonderful poetry... |
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Christina Myers Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 159 |
this is lovely... a quiet poem that takes the breath away... bravo, ms.de vine... -C |
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WhenDovesCry Junior Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 16California, USA |
i can relate to so much of this...the questions within it...beautiful... |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
The truth is in The Rhyme Miss I like this lots!!!!!! |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Poet, This is one of your best. It is well written and strong and, as always, very lyrical. sandman |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
And to think, I didn't want to post this poem because I wasn't sure it was good enough! Thanks, guys, I'm in need of your affirmation right now... |
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Karibear Junior Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 10San Jose, Ca, USA |
WOW WOW, you say that you were afraid to post this poem?!? It reminds me of so many broken promises in my life. . . Thank you for posting it despite your needless reservations! Karibear ------------------ Turn your face to the sunlight and you shall not see the shadow. -- Helen Keller |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
This brings back memories and opens old wounds, too ignored to heal. Perhaps now they will. ------------------ Patience is a virtue, but virtue has never been one of my redeeming qualities. |
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ashlerr Junior Member
since 1999-06-11
Posts 23chino hills, ca usa |
very touching...i really enjoyed this one |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
VERY well done and expressed. Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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POETIC THUG Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 42HOUSTON TEXAS BABY |
WELL THIS THUG JUST WANNA HOLLA,AND LET U KNOW THAT I BEEN PEEPIN YOU FOR AWHILE YOU ALWAYS MAKE THE WORDS SOUND RIGHT. |
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