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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 1999-08-01 03:24 PM

I float upon a distant cloud
As mysteries of your love enshroud,
For in my heart your words resound,
You bring such joy, but yet confound.

Empyrian delights you bring,
With voices of the gods you sing,
But then you say it matters not,
Where one seeks their Camelot.

A devil or an angel be?
You carry me to praecipe,
And yet I yearn my Lorelei,
Upon the rocks, I do espy.

The day shall come when love will die,
Within my heart my soul shall cry,
It matters not for I shall seek,
My Lorelei, for I am weak.

[This message has been edited by Tim (edited 08-01-99).]

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

1 posted 1999-08-01 04:04 PM

lovely...a thoroughly enjoyable read...i admire the way you rhyme

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I will live my life as i, will undoubtedly die - alone. ~Morrissey~

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 1999-08-01 05:21 PM

Nice read....reminds me a lot of some of the older poets styles...I like this one.

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

3 posted 1999-08-01 08:52 PM

Here at the nursing home, they let us have access to the 'puters every night for an hour, right after the Lawrence Welk show.
Actually, I like to think I am in the twilight years of my middle age and not an older poet.(this is a joke by the way)
glad you enjoyed the poem.

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 1999-08-01 10:51 PM

Float upon a distant cloud.....lovely..... Everything is right on with this one... meter, rhyme, imagery! Well done, sir!

CSwtThng
Member

since 1999-07-28

Posts 124

5 posted 1999-08-01 11:04 PM

Beautiful and uplifting.

Delores Hall
Member

since 1999-07-16

Posts 342
USA

6 posted 1999-08-02 01:21 AM

Wonderful poem.Tim if you don't mind me
asking what kind of work do you do there?
I worked with senior citizens for quite a
few years.And I miss it.One can learn a lot
from them.Anyways I enjoyed your poem.

Areya
Junior Member

since 1999-06-26

Posts 16

7 posted 1999-08-02 02:29 AM

Lovely. Well done

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