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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
elvira That was great! I loved the style of repeatedly asking the Man in the Moon questions that led me through the story. I'm sorry for your loss. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
This touched me deeply. Your brother lives on in your heart and I'm sure he's pleased to be remembered in such loving words. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
One must continue to live on for we never truely lose, we gain a guiding hand. As we all can see your brother is guiding yours quite gracefully! Your words are wonderful. blueloon |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Elvira, this poem is great. I am not afraid to write or read serious poems (my other personality and I both do!). This one was really neat the way you kept talking about the man in the moon. Imagine, a hundred years from now, people will read this and know about all the current events going on that particular day. OK, now I'm rambling, so I'll cut to the chase: Your poem was well written and a beautiful tribute to your brother. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I remember sitting in front of the television watching Mr. Armstrong take his "one small step" into history on that particular day. I was six at the time. It's one of those events where people look back and say "I was doing this... or doing that." I'm sorry such painful memories are connected to this time where so many are celebrating the anniversary of this grand event. Your offering serves as a reminder that the world does not stop turning and day to day life continues in the shadows of such things. I will not tell you this is a "great" poem, for it stems from the tragic death of a loved one. I will say "Thank you" for opening your heart and sharing the pain therein. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Truth is, I was all of six for a couple of days (7/17/63). Same year? Maybe. Ya, I'm a moon child. Rather synchronistic, don't you think? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow...I do not know what to say. Wonderfully written, but oh so sad. ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I am SO glad I was able to read this poem. How intricately woven this piece is! I literally felt chills through me as my eyes moved from line to line. How sad that it took a tragedy to produce it. My heart goes out to you, Elvira. Is your man in the moon....God? |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
don't worry elvira, serious poems don't scare me away. in fact, i'm drawn to them. nothing's better than a poem that makes you think or stirrs emotions from deep within. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
what a sad poem I actually felt that one -it was very touching. |
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Delores Hall Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 342USA |
What a horrible way to lose someone you love.Believe me I've spent quite a few late nights up worrying about my son when he has been drinking.Young people just don't realize the hazards that can come with drinking.Sorry about your loss. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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