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Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 1999-07-20 08:12 PM

Hidden in the valley of despair
living for the next medication
mind shut down in need of rest,
curled tightly in fetal meditation

Living in the shadow of life
reasons unknown or unclear
waiting for the healing to start
to abandon this place of fear

Slowly as the gray film dissolves
and his eyes focus on what’s real
He walks towards a plateau to seek
what the heart can only feel

A glimmer of sun, smiles at him
bringing a promise of hope,
and giving him a sense that he
will soon be able to cope

A hand reaching down to lift him
to even a higher elevation
fills his heart with wonder at
the spirit’s reclamation

Each day is still a wonder
of life’s pain and it’s glory
each step taken is just a chapter
in his mind’s liberation story

Ohme
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

1 posted 1999-07-20 08:20 PM

What can I say ??

A difficult subject, well delivered. I like it.

Dragon
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since 1999-07-14

Posts 138
Highmount,NY ,USA

2 posted 1999-07-20 08:24 PM

Beautifully done!I loved it.

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

3 posted 1999-08-13 02:13 AM

Thank you. Wanted to resusitate this one.

Christopher

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since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

4 posted 1999-08-13 04:10 AM

You are indeed a wonder, and a true role model Poet deVine!

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...the things I did not know at first, I learned by doing twice.
-Billy Joel

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

5 posted 1999-08-13 06:53 AM

that was "devine"....good work....(but remember, a compliment from a dumbass like me may not be the greatest critical analysis one could hope for)...but I like it?

Michael

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since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

6 posted 1999-08-13 08:51 AM

This really hit home. I must say thank you.

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

7 posted 1999-08-13 09:09 AM

I really love your style and the ease that comes when reading your work....very "eye" friendly - As for the content, I think the reader is captivated from the very first stanza...great setting and you followed through so smoothly with the "process"...Fabulous flow darling ! BRAVO ! (clapping)

One of my favorites from you, yet.

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 1999-08-13 10:29 AM

Wow! Excellent poem! I love the line "Each day is still a wonder." After stepping (or crawling) away from the darkness, they are indeed!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 1999-08-13 10:44 AM

Poet deVine, You showed him the path, but will he take it? Nice work, enjoyed.

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