Open Poetry #1 |
You Never Said Good-bye To Me |
~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
You never said good-bye to me. You left without a trace. I didn't get that last chance to once more see your face. You never said good-bye to me. You left me all alone. You never left your address, or means to talk to you by phone. You never said good-bye to me. I miss you so much now. I thought that you loved me, but I just do not see how. You never said good-bye to me. You've hurt me through and through- Not just because you've left me- 'Cause I can't say good-bye to you. ©~onevoice~ ------------------ ~onevoice~ "I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart." |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I like this one, you did well in capturing the emotion of it. I feel the same. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Thank you, Dear Dream! I always appreciate your praise! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart." |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
I like this one, onevoice. It is good. ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice sentiment in very good rythym and rhyme. I liked this poem. ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Thank you all! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart." |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
I see this as a desire to put a tangible sense of finality on the relationship. I like it. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This must be a fantasy, one voice. Who could ever say goodbye to you? |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Nothing worse than an open wound. Closure is always needed before one can heal. Nice flow, fine rhyme. |
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Dragon Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 138Highmount,NY ,USA |
Nicely done! I like it. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Unfortunately, Balladeer, this is all too true...my best friend, well, the one I thought was my best friend, moved away and never said good-bye. To all of you, again, thank you. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart." |
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