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February 11th 1997
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February 11th 1997 |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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It was early morning a young boy arose Grabbed his money and slipped on his clothes The same he wore when he stole in that night To find his mother was still to be all right On his face he wore a hateful little smirk She had been sick for a month dodging their work A sore on her foot that never was heeling She said it would kill her he still was unfeeling Selfish little boy to think of her that way Would he regret it for the rest of his days? He had always loved his mother to be sure But for these last seconds a lifetime to cure It was dark in the hall he tiptoed descending Life as he knew it soon to be ending Frozen in time with wishes to rewind If only he had the presence of mind And still one last chance for regret As still another second he had yet He threw on the lights a bastard uncaring To find his mother lying there staring On that night the world was left spinning The stars all black the devil was grinning But God was there ever forgiving His head to her heart still she was living The ambulance came and took her away He followed so close as he could belay But the only security that was to be found That annoying siren was still making sound In the emergency room for hours he waited His prayers did flow though a bit belated No one would speak or tell him the worst They all looked on him as if he was cursed He knew He knew he had to have known The rest of his life he would wander alone He cried with no shoulder he always had thought Would be there forever if he got this distraught The chaplain calmed him but offered no lie He told the boy soon his mother would die They sat and they prayed and there’s nothing belated So into the night those two brothers waited The term the doctor used “Son will you pull the plug?” A term most used as a sobering drug A little boy with a decision to make Never thinking later a murderer would make And on February 11th 1997 My dearest mother was greeted in heaven And with poems such as this one that I lay down My momma I love her she’ll always be around Sadly this poem is true [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-13-99).] [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-14-99).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Walt, you outdid yourself. You pushed hard enough and nailed this one. ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. DreamEvil© |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
Walt, I am so grateful that some people are still able to share feelings like that. I'm sorry that the pain has to exist, but I'm very glad that an outlet has been found. This was an extraordinary piece. I hope you'll always be able to hold your pen to your heart and let it flow like this... this was really beautiful. *hugs* thank you for sharing this with all of us. ~moonlight~ |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
wow, incredibly heart wrenching...I feel for you. What a heartfelt piece. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Walt, I don't even know what to say... Magnificent work, stunning topic. I am so glad that you shared this. Thank you.  ------------------ ~one voice~ *You are you, and I am I, and if by chance we find each other, it's beautiful.* |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Shamelessly moving this up for a friend. |
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Cinderella Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 152Arizona |
Too bad this happens more often than we know.  |
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leelew Member
since 1999-07-10
Posts 89highmount,ny,usa |
I know your Mother is reading this,and she loves you forever........she will always be there....if only you look.Truly a soul searching poem. |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
The tears for such a hard decision you had to make. May the peace you know be that you allowed her to sleep after a life that surely was full, after all, she had you for a son. This was beautiful Walt, truly moving. ------------------ For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
I know this was very difficult for you to write, Walt. You struggled with it, but it was worth it. Murderer? no. Loving son, yes. I'm glad you finally were able to write this and I know you are, too. Good job! It moved me very much. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Poetry can be a catharsis for pain. Sharing your pain can sometimes lighten your load. Thank you for sharing your pain with us.  |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
Is love giving the ultimate gift? Easing another's suffering if we can? This was beautiful and poignant. Thanks for posting this Izzy ------------------ Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads.....Henry David Thoreau |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Absolutely heart felt Walt.. The story's of our lives we put to poetry is the true art of our craft, and the labor of our love for it. Applause, Applause, Applause!! I agree with Poet deVine, sharing our pain is letting go of it, Being a Diabetic for 35 years I'm aware of what can happen with just a little sore on the foot ! So I've told my son's in present tense, Remember she gave you life, you gave her peace --------------------------------------------- If with pen in hand I've made you think Then I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
My mother would not take care of herself she allowed her wound to fester also we were so poor we couldn't afford her diabetic medication..she would never take a handout from anyone oh how i treated her so poor when i was resenting her all laid up in bed while i was resumin the family buisness alone...then i found her...she died of toxic shock complicated by a diabetic coma...i told her goodbye as i told them to kill her and i think she was aware i was killing her...but my peace is made yes thank you all |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Walt, I'm so sorry to hear this...I have family that is diabetic also... I commend you for sharing this with us- it couldn't have been easy. ------------------ ~one voice~ *You are you, and I am I, and if by chance we find each other, it's beautiful.* |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
Wow Walt... very powerful! Im sorry to hear about that tho... my heart and prayers go out to you *hugs* ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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quote99 Junior Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 17US |
Hi, I'm new here, so please forgive me for asking these questions. Is this free verse? Some of the lines sort of rhyme and some sort of don't so I was just wondering if that's the way it is. I wanted to read some poems before putting any of mine here so I stumbled on this one. You must be young to have been a boy in 1997 and writing about it now it's good that someone so young can be allowed to write stuff here as I was worried I would not fit in. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i dunno i thought the rhyming was ok...to explain the 1997 no i didnt use it just cuz it rhymes with heaven...i am 24 and this did just happen 2 years ago but it seems a lifetime ago so i used the term lil boy cuz i was so immature and innocent then but have seen alot sinc...i plan on making this a three parter of my year of 1997 and ill be a lil boy till i learn something yes |
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Augchic711 Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 80O'Fallon, IL, USA |
walt~ thank you for sharing this! you did it so well i could feel your pain so greatly and i understand how you feel so young when you are so innocent one day but then something happens causing you to grow up the very next day! Walt you have a unspeakable talent i have nothing to say that could possibly describe it! *******Augchic711******* |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I told you did good, Wally. ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. DreamEvil© |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Walt...this was extreamly sad. Guilt is a hard thing to live with, but I have found that for thebetter part...we tend to blame ourselves for something that no matter what, we could not have prevented. I am sorry for your loss, but Walt, please do be kind to yourself. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Walt, I think you did a terrific job with this! I imagine this was very difficult to write and brought the pain back fresh. I am truly sorry for your loss. My friend, don't look at it as killing her. Look at it as setting her free from her pain. She is in a better place with no sickness now. God bless you Walt! Don't let guilt over-run you. You did the best thing for her! Thanks for sharing this!!!! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Well done Walt....I know exactly where this came from in your heart pal..... |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
walt this is a tremendously heartfelt work. I am honored to read such deep, deep feelings on such a difficult part of your life. I don't think your mother would have thought of it as killing her...I believe she is surely proud that you showed how much you really love her by freeing her of pain. Not anyone can make that kind of decision. You are a strong and compassionate soul. Thanks for sharing this. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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