Open Poetry #1 |
An Afternoon's Delight |
DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
After much consideration, I decided to post this here, sorry for the length. Heady perfume rising from your hair, the sight of your liquid eyes, brightens my night and prevents my despair. The curve of your cheek and the taste of your neck make my only regret, taking so long to speak. Kissing my way to your milky shoulders and inhaling the scent of your flesh I am maddened by desire mounting ever higher and desperately want you out of your dress. Watching the heave of your chest through that sheerest dress drives my hands onward putting my control to the test. One button at a time, I'll make your trust mine and upon your pleasures my eyes will dine. Feeling you tense as the last button comes loose, I hesitate only to find your desire matches my own as you lean harder into my fire and I hear you moan. My hands knead the smoothness of your skin, where to begin?While kissing your neck, my hands direct a chorus of feelings within, none of them suspect. Losing myself in your eyes, twin pools of midnight dew, my hands travel down and around, pulling you to the ground where I will start anew. Dropping to the ground at your side as you try to hide the trembling gripping you deep inside, I then sit astride your thighs And gaze deeply into Your eyes. As my hands caress each curve of your velvet breast I must surely confess, not only am I striving to keep from arriving But also my dear, to conceal my own fear Of being like all the rest. Lowering myself down, pressing you into the ground, I slowly begin to kiss your perfect face from forehead to chin Your mouth opens with a low, throaty, moan As I gently I slip my tongue in. From arching back to heaving thighs, low-throated moans and thunderous cries, we travel from peak to peak without The need to speak, giving each other a gift That heals the rift Of distance. Our passion spent, our ardor gone, with the afternoon grown long, with a gentle caress and deepest regret, I tenderly help you On with your dress. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. DreamEvil© |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Wow DreamEvil, you took my breath away. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very heavy....and not only the breathing. I enjoyed every word. |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
With much ado, I thank you for posting your poem here. Bravo!!! blueloon |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
Great, Dreamie, I told you that you could finish it... And finish you did...very nicely. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you all, I was more than a bit nervous posting this piece. My first attempt at this style. |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Wow....ya, that's very good! For your first attempt with this style, you did very well. Of all the poems I've seen of yours.....I like this one best. I don't know what that says of me....but anyway, I like it. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Morning used to be my favorite time of the day, but after reading this, I've changed to the afternoon. Delightful (no pun intended), delicious (pun intended). Now, please excuse me while I call my office. I want to have afternoons off for awhile..you never know.. it's best to be prepared! This is good stuff! No need to be nervous - you can relax, your first time is behind you. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Whew! Thought it bordered on being too pornographic for this forum. Thanks for the vindication. |
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thursdayschild Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169Houston, Tx. |
can I breath now? intense, passionate, wonderfully erotic. I like the structure of this one, with the first line of each stanza long, and the others, shorter. Don't think I've ever seen that before...very effective for this poem. great work! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you, I did it like that for the font, trying to bring each verse to a close. |
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leelew Member
since 1999-07-10
Posts 89highmount,ny,usa |
And you were worried! Still tingling as I re-read it! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you, L. |
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