Open Poetry #1 |
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Carved Apart |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I don't know if this verse will work, Nor even if it will rhyme. I felt the need to write or go berserk, I didn't worry about keeping time. I read a verse from one dear to me today, It drove a blow straight through my heart, Felt like being abandoned by Fate, right from the start. She made me cry, she made my heart bleed She filled my hollow soul with echoes of her need. My heart clenched as my resolve wrenched, I felt a killing lust like a thrust through my brain. When the sorrow had passed and I could see again, All I saw was red, everything tinted by dread. I felt the old need welling within, climbing ever higher, Becoming a roaring, raging bonfire. The ecstasy of killing and the heady feel of pain All came rushing back again. I tried to call to see if it was true, she didn't answer Either not home or not picking up the phone. I wavered between misery and madness, rage and sadness Until tonight when she came online, this more than Anything convinced me she was fine. Now what do I do with this impotent rage of mine? ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. DreamEvil© |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
o i like the ending many times i have felt this thanx dream |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Words are wonderful outlets for rage... keep on writing... unleash the madness! Let it all out! That pain and sadness! You know I love your words. And thank you so much for your concern! ![]() ------------------ ~one voice~ For Myself, I live, Live intensely and am fed by life, and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Quick replies are like soft, lover's sighs. I find them exhilirating. Thank you. |
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leelew Member
since 1999-07-10
Posts 89highmount,ny,usa |
So true...I'm glad I chack back here tonight..my thoughts exactly!I know that killing rage....and savour it! |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I don't feel this rage that often, being a mellow person, but when I do, this is how I feel. Wonderfully done, DreamEvil! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
I know this one was for one voice...I see her posting has left you with the same emotions as I...the two of you have left me almost speechless today, and for me that says alot. ------------------ Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Very true, all of you. She sent me to my knees. |
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