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I cherish you Fall...
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I cherish you Fall... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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I cherish you Fall; you’re my love and my curse I’m dying of thirst; my fatigue pays its toll I beg you, don’t stall, order clouds to burst, I will crawl to the puddles to fill up my soul Here you stand on the edge, facing your fate And the time will not wait, turning over the page It will set off the change, not a second delayed, Immature at your age you will vacate the stage Drop by drop, leaf by leaf, you are closer to snow I observe you in awe, with a great disbelief, Not a wrinkle of grief even though you must go And with less time to breathe only higher you heave Only higher you rise in a whirlpool of leaves While nature’s striptease attracts all the eyes And you flee in disguise while nobody sees Then you cease to exist slowly shrinking in size ------------------ I fell in love and kept on falling [This message has been edited by Master (edited 09-14-99).] |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Master this is quite beautiful. The imagery is outstanding  I enjoyed it much.------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thanks Caroline, I'm glad you liked it. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
All I can say is this is a very well written piece. The images you have created with your words are fantastic. Fall happens to be my favorite of all seasons ------------------ "This world is not conclusion. A sequel stands beyond, Invisable as music, But positive as sound." ~Emily Dickinson |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Mine too, hoot! Thanks for responding! ------------------ I fell in love and kept on falling |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Master, Enjoyed the read. |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
THanks Seymore, glad you liked it. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I like fall and winter best myself, Master! You have captured it so well in another fantastic piece. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Fall is also my favorite season, thanks Elizabeth! |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
I've edited it a bit, what do you think? |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I really enjoyed that!!! The imagary was beautiful!! Autumn is my favorite season!! Nice poem!! Thanks Justbleu ------------------ "Is she living in a dream, Is she playing make-believe???" |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
yes, very beautiful imagery indeed Master.....here in south Florida there really is no Autumn, so thanks for the lovely picture......... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thanks Justbleu! Autumn is my fav season also. Pepper, I'm glad you liked it. Here in NY Autumn is beautiful, I love this kind of weather. Thanks for your comments. ------------------ I fell in love and kept on falling |
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