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DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-09-13 09:04 PM

You tore my hellish world into pieces.
I was forced to abandon all my doubt.
The hatred beating in my heart ceases.
Dangling my soul twisted my heart about.

My fevered sanity cries out for you.
I feel hollow from the loss of my pain.
The night that we met I have come to rue.
A lonely litany is my refrain.

I fell in love with you, deeply and fast.
For a single touch of your hand I yearn.
Now I find those first moments are long past.
Dispassion my carved up heart must relearn.

My hot-blooded heartbreaker tell me true,
can I forget the pain of knowing you?

©1999 DreamEvil

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Pain is life, life is short, I will endure.
DreamEvil©

beowulf_26
Member

since 1999-06-29

Posts 183

1 posted 1999-09-13 09:13 PM

The first line says it all. Very thick. Hope everything goes well, keep up the work.

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Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing.

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

2 posted 1999-09-13 09:16 PM

Very angry Dream! I can sense the hurt that you feel as you write this piece. Excellent work though...

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~onevoice~

"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris. Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

3 posted 1999-09-13 09:18 PM

What can I say...again your talent is
shining..."Dispassion my carved up heart must relearn." Took hold of me and wouldn't
let go !!

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Helewes

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 1999-09-13 09:19 PM

Well, this is so-so...kind of dull and boring if you ask me (gotcha!)...wondered what you would do if I started out that way! LOL

If you write this good consistantly, I may have to hang up my quill.....sigh...... excellent as usual, DE.

caroline
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since 1999-08-16

Posts 1218
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5 posted 1999-09-13 09:42 PM

I'm running out of superlatives.

You are daunting in your excellence, Sir Dream.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 1999-09-14 09:25 AM

Nicely done Dream

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"This world is not conclusion.
A sequel stands beyond,
Invisable as music,
But positive as sound."
~Emily Dickinson

Iloveit
Senior Member

since 1999-09-02

Posts 1121
NM

7 posted 1999-09-14 11:46 AM

every once in a while I am tempted to call myself a poet, but then I come here and read your work, so many poems, on so many varied subjects and emotions, and all very well done!....you have a gift, thank you for using it here

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

8 posted 1999-09-14 12:31 PM

Dream: I echo the sentiments of all before. Your writing is excellent and a challenge to us all to write form within our deepest emotions.

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

9 posted 1999-09-14 02:23 PM

No doubt Andrew! What can I say, I ditto the above also! You have no boundaries or limits in your writing. That is certainly a gift.

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