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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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The sign said stop as you kept going Through a flashing red hand And unwavering traffic Scare yourself at least once a day As life goes by unflinching Paste your memories one by one On a seventeen-inch screen For all to see Threaten an executive's safety 'Cause who cares about one big man In a world of little people Know that you deserve more Than once-told feelings and short-lived adrenaline And buy yourself some more time As the day gets shorter and shorter Listen to the rush of cool water Playing melodically on night's black drum As a mechanical pulse keeps beat with your heart Watch the ink set dry on a white-lined page While your friends joke around in the fore-ground Look over your large rimmed bifocals Notice just once what you've already missed Wrap it up in another thumbnail view And catalog it in your archive for future reference Everyone can scare another But when you scare yourself You'll know that you've done something right You may feel that slight rush of adrenaline As it meanders throughout your veins And takes a crash course with your nerves Catch it when it comes to your head Or you'll pass out with the overdose of blood Bottle it for resale and get back to me for more details |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Applause!!! Bravo!!! That trip to DC must have put some adrenalin in your veins! I know it did mine!..... mwahahahaha.... sit down and quit doing the dishes! |
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Justin Thyme Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 216Oz |
MI? MI dreamin' or is this a great poem and only one person has responded so far? MI the only other one who's going to respond to this decent poem? Well done, Mr. Intruder. -Justin T. |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
RU...RU JT? Or MI just Trip---ping...? *grins* Thanks for thinking so. BTW, Doreen...everyone's allowed to do the dishes now, especially mine. Oh, and that hat in your trunk...I'm pretty sure it's mine. *wink* ------------------ Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true? |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Is that why you stopped at all those mailboxes???  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
LOL, M.I. How's things back in Kansas? BTW, Nan, those boxes say stop on them, he was just following directions, It's not like he got the secret service called on us...hehe michael |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh boy....if only we knew what you people are talking about....(sigh) Great read, by the way !!! ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Masked Intruder, I feel like I have just been run over by a wild tornado...talk about anadrenilin rush! This poem builds and forces the reader to move faster to keep up with its pace so they can reach the end...I did reach the end, made it to the finish line but all out of breath!This is a wonderful poem...insightful and thought provoking and damn inspirational! I enjoyed riding that tornado...great stuff! :-) ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
And Beki, He whipped this thing out in 10 or 15 minutes while me and deperado were fighting over the one computer available! Come on M.I., kick down some fresh lines, don't me me come there and squeeze 'em out of you!!! Michael |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Wow! This was extremely well said and done. This is advice I think I needed to hear tonight. Thank you. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Siofra
since 2000-09-28
Posts 551State of Suspended Passion |
Well...how did this get lost?  A Racoon, bloomin'? I thought flowers did that!  Either way, you have done a lovely job with this. I am many. |
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