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Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

0 posted 1999-09-21 03:25 AM

haiku...

Wild geese flying south;
shadows that cross the moonlight
cross the water, too.

The shadows lengthen;
morning leaves a fringe of frost
on front porch pumpkins.

Sudden silence
so deep even crickets
hesitate.

Crossing the river,
that old man carries the moon
on his shoulder.

An early frost
and a single cicada
to sing me to sleep

tanka...

we the sun and moon
spinning in a dance of words -
I covet your light.
Take my hand in yours, pull me
into your gravity field.

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society

Pepper
Member Elite

since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

1 posted 1999-09-21 06:45 AM

always a pleasure to read your posts Beki........

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Skyfyre
Senior Member

since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

2 posted 1999-09-21 09:47 AM

I LOVE THESE!!!

Whew ... (straightening my skirt) ... ahem, I love haiku, can't write them worth a darn, but having the talent to say so much in so few syllables is truly amazing.

You have my respect, Beki.

Nocht

PS: My favorite was the 4th haiku ... what a vivid pagan image!

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-09-21 10:07 AM

Again Beki...very nice work
There is a vast market for Haiku out there....are you aware??

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

4 posted 1999-09-21 09:06 PM

Thanks everyone. Nocht, there is a little story about that poem. I wrote it several years ago. Last year Disneyland implemented the new Mulan parade. The end of the parade is a float that is meant to be an old man, wise man...very tall, with a large lighted globe floating along behind his head...meant to be the moon I am sure. First time I saw it I freaked ..."MY GOD! It's my poem!" my sister didn't understand of course..but everytime I watch the parade I smile to see my haiku personified.I visit Disneyland frequently...love the place and I have an annual pass. :-)

Elizabeth