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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
and think about what might have been if we had met in another time if I were yours and you were mine ~~~~~ I stroll along the ocean shore and think about the time before I met you…what I'd have missed the anticipation of your kiss… ~~~~~ The sand gives way beneath my feet You would have made my life complete You are the one I'd been looking for I don't believe I could have loved you more ~~~~~ I see the sandpipers run along and what I feel, it may be wrong but my love for you will never cease My heart will never find its peace ~~~~~ I sit and watch the waves roll in and think about what would have been if we had crossed that unseen line if I were yours and you were mine ~~~~~ © caroline 1999 ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Buzzygirl Junior Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 42St. Paul, MN USA |
very lovely... a bit sad... but beautiful! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Wonderfully crafted and well spoken. ------------------ Pain is life, life is short, I will endure. DreamEvil© |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
An extreamly beautiful piece Caroline. The rhyme and rhthym are quite good and the message behind...even better!! ------------------ "The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
BuzzyGirl, Dream, Hoot...many thanks. It was a tough one for me to write, though the rhyme came easily. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely lovely, Caroline. But that is not surprising! Well done! ------------------ Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I echo all above...really enjoed the read... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Ditto, lol ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
Superb, well written, well presented, well done! ------------------ Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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amber Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 240los banos, ca, |
caroline, such a beautiful poem, ive found myself here many times throughout my life, and ive realized that often wondering what might have been, might be the crulest thing your heart can endure. it proves maybe its better to take chances instead of wondering later. very pretty! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Beautiful, Caroline. Those are thoughts echoed by many in this world. |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
This was a lovely poem, I truly enjoyed it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Caroline, Wonderful poem, well written, you have talent. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Poignant... excellent! |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
 Gee...thanks! ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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