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Glory to God... |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Glory to God In the Highest Gensis tells the beginning of man, Loving his wife all that he can. Owning free will, and growing fruit, Refrain from eating,for I will give you root. Young as they were, they disobeyed, To find themselves lost in dismay. Gently, He said, now there is sin, Ordained by Me, it is here you begin. Decayed and weakend never to win. In leaving the Garden where they slept, The trials surmounted as they wept. Heritage brought relief of man, It was Moses who renewed the land, God gave us Jesus, Our Savior so grand, Helping us...like footprints in the sand. Examples of the apostles and Messiah too, Sacrificed themselves and freed us to do The love of Jesus, for it is true. ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. Marianne Williamson |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Julie, you should consider posting this in the spiritual section of the main forum when Ron opens it for submissions..... This is wonderful!!  |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Thank you, Nan. Thought I would try something a little different and good grief...it worked. p.s. I will take you up on that offer. ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. Marianne Williamson |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
your poem reminded me of this song we sang at church when i was a kid: "Yes Jesus loves me, the Bible tells me so". Amen to your poem |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Well julie, I must say that you wrote a very good poem. I just think the only thing that you could work on with this poem is continuing the history in the word. You speak very in depthly of Adam and Eve then move to Moses, which is a decent jump. But, and I say this only in a creative way, you made too much of a jump to Jesus. It would have been a little better, in my opinion if you would have built up to Jesus. The whole Old Testament is a preperation for Jesus. So I think it would have been even better if you would have expounded on more, such as going on to talk about Joshua, then on to Gideon and Samson, to Ruth and Boaz, to Jonathan and David, to Daniel, to the other prophets, to John the Baptist, then to Jesus. I think you understand what I am getting at. Not to say the poem is bad, I just think you could have made it that more greater. Keep up the good work. Jfreak |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It takes courage to put your faith out there, especially, I believe, in poetic form. You've done a wonderful work here, and dittos follow everyone else's comments. Good work, Lady! |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Thank you all for your endearing comments. Although I do have a special message for jfreak. I am not a minister or hold a priesthood and not well versed on the Old Testament (although I should be). I do have strong faith and that was the message I intended to share with my audience. Thank you for your opinion. ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. Marianne Williamson |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Julie, You should be proud of yourself, this poem is splendid, I really enjoyed what it had to offer. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Julie, You write well no matter the subject. Good job. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very nicely done, Julie! ------------------ Denise |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Gee LostDreamer...that's a huge compliment. Seymour: What can I say...I always enjoy your work and am always flattered by your words. Denise: I am always interested in your thoughts...I admire your work so... HUGS AND TO ALL OF YOU! ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Thou who has given so much to me, give one thing more: a grateful heart. >George Herbert |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
wonderful Julie and amen........ ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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