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Iloveit
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0 posted 1999-09-27 06:24 PM


counting poems in my sleep

last night i slept fitfully
if at all
remembering you in poetry form.
writing poem after poem to you
in my head,
when i should have been asleep.

wonderful as they might have been,
now with the morning light,
they are all gone,
my heart empty,
my head aching,
not a poem in sight.

would that i could write you back
into my arms


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©1999 Iloveit


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suthern
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1 posted 1999-09-27 06:31 PM


Beautiful, Lovey!
Iloveit
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2 posted 1999-09-27 06:35 PM


well not as interesting as John Elway *big grin* but same tossing and turning effect I guess....lol thanks friend
RainbowGirl
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3 posted 1999-09-27 06:37 PM


ILoveit: Yep, counting words sure beats counting sheep...ooops

HUSG

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Denise
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4 posted 1999-09-27 08:37 PM


Very lovely! And I know what you mean about composing poetry in your head when you should be sleeping! But it's such fun though isn't it?

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Denise

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5 posted 1999-09-27 08:47 PM


This poem is REALLY well done. I've done that and I've made that same final wish. Great job at expressing it.
Mark4Him@juno.com
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6 posted 1999-09-27 08:51 PM



Sounds like a discription of my nights.Sometimes all the poetry in the world couldn't make up for having the one you love,because the real poetry is life.Sometimes there are no words that could come close to one moment of truth and life and love.

hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 1999-09-27 09:16 PM


WONDERFUL!!! This was really well written...I love it!!
JTF
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8 posted 1999-09-28 03:44 AM


Another great spurt Lovey ...

Pardon my ignorance but who's John Elway ?

Pssst, my English is lousy but in the last stanza shouldn't it be "wish that I could ..." ?

Beki
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9 posted 1999-09-28 04:49 AM


Very nice, my friend :-)Have wished the last line often myself !JTF, I think John Elway is a n athlete...perhaps hockey or baseball, maybe basketball...I am sports-disabled LOL
Iloveit
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10 posted 1999-09-28 11:02 AM


Thanks all!
Rainbow girl yep lol, think I will leave the sheep alone lol

dsnyder...sigh, yes it sure is

Balladeer, yep, guess its the poets lament, no matter how great a poet you are, you still can't "write" someone back ...sigh...thanks

Mark, exactly, glad you liked it

hoot...coming from you, that means a lot, love your poems too!

JTF, well, John Elway, I think he is or was a quarterback for the Denver Broncos...now, as to why he keeps auntie awake, guess you are gonna have to ask her on that one lol

and nope, the senitiment of the last line is stronger than wishing, it means if there were anyway possible that I could do it, then for certain I would....

and beki, thanks, and LOL@sports disabled, I know what you mean, but with me its directions, I call myself directionally disabled...and I always thought of it as a bad thing, but a friend of mine and I were talking and he said maybe I was just adventurous..... I like that better than being disabled lol



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suthern
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11 posted 1999-09-28 11:06 AM


Lovey: From the depths of my heart, with greatest sincerity.... :-)~~~~~~~~~~~
Iloveit
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12 posted 1999-09-28 11:14 AM


oh and if you knew how that just made me ROF&GMAO you would stick it back in lololol

big hugs, and I just love your sincerity ....sheesh I almost believed it.... *big grin*

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13 posted 2004-04-18 02:18 PM


glad I found this back here...where are you?
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