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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Your hand on my thigh, Your mouth moving on my skin - Forgotten pleasures! Kiss after kiss, My mouth on your mouth - Whispering haiku! Watching you sleep - Cricketsong for lullaby, My hand on your heart. ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I'm glad to see you posted this here....as I said before, it is romantically beautiful!! ------------------ Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same. Thank you all for leaving footprints!! |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thanks Hoot, now I will move it back to the top so it doesn't get buried before others see it < |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Beki, I guess this is the season of love. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I think I explained in a response to one of your postings that the form of senyru was like haiku except that its subject was the nature of man rather than the nature of the universe. No seasonal references necessary as these are more properly senyru. I don't want to confuse you after the issue I made of your poem in the adult section, please feel free to ask anything else you want to know, the fact is the syllable count and the seasonal reference are among the least important features that make a poem haiku. |
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