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Winter (reposted paradelle for Nochtdraco)
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Winter (reposted paradelle for Nochtdraco) |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Night is cold and lonely Night is cold and lonely Still the tempest does turn Still the tempest does turn Cold tempest is still night and turn does the lonely. Sparkles of ice glitter Sparkles of ice glitter Cloudy breath floats away Cloudy breath floats away Breath of cloudy sparkles away ice breath glitter. Winter brings it's caress Winter brings it's caress Delight rewards the soul Delight rewards the soul Winter rewards delight it's soul brings the caress. Winter glitter sparkles and tempest floats away it's cloudy soul does turn the ice of lonely night caress is the rewards still breath brings cold delight. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Thank you for posting this one, Dream ... it paints a vivid picture ... I am a bit confused, however, by the format ... I have not found any information on the paradelle form; I see the repetition of lines, but the order of the repeated first and last words confuse me a bit ... think you could elaborate with a "map" of the form..? BTW: In re your post to my challenge, how about a haiku or three..?  Thanks, Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
A quote from Nan: A total of four stanzas Stanza's #1, #2, and #3 have to be: Line 1 and Line 2 are repeated verbatim LIne 3 and Line 4 are repeated verbatim Line 5 and Line 6 are a composite of the words (no more and no less) used in lines 1-4 Stanza #4 uses all (no more and no less) of the words used in stanza's #1-#3 in the first three stanza's Lines one and two are identical Lines three and four are identical Lines five and six are a composite of all of the words used in LInes one through four Stanza four is a composite of all words used in stanza's 1 - 3 ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 09-24-1999).] |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
OK, I am just full of questions tonight ... When you say "composite" ... does that mean there are NO other words allowed, and how much liberty am I allowed to take with the words: ie, breathed vs breathe, etc. (should all of them be identical)? I noticed in one of the stanzas you threw in an "and" ... I know, I know, I'm a pest! Nocht |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Not at all. The "and" is from the first stanza. You must use exactly the same words, all of them. No more and no less. 'Tis more of a puzzle than a poem really. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Arrrgh! Are these what poets have to write if they've been very, very bad...? A puzzle indeed ... I shall, if nothing else, make a valiant effort! Nocht |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Good for you! I found this to be the most challenging format I have yet attempted so I will look forward to your efforts. For a more private discourse on form, contact me by ICQ or e-mail, at your leisure. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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