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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-09-22 01:26 AM

Deceit drips from women's lips like acid.
Lives are scared by the melting of heart's flesh.
Such pain is caused by a face held placid.
Wounds scar over then they open them fresh.

Sorry Ladies, no two sides to this coin.
For unknowing carnal knowledge, you lie.
You think a man's heart is yours to purloin.
You wont have the joy of making me cry.

I will remember women's grace come dawn.
I cast aspersions of truth on them now.
For this life at least I am no one's pawn.
My ship of fate I command from the prow.

Soon enough will I come to calm my rage.
Distrust now has riven me to the core.
No more will I make of my mind a cage.
Hatred abates for she whom I adore.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 09-22-1999).]

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

1 posted 1999-09-22 01:28 AM

OUCH! You still can't remove this grin I have permanently a-fixed though, Dream!
I like this though, I must say.

Lucie
Senior Member

since 1999-06-20

Posts 1077
Houston

2 posted 1999-09-22 01:40 AM

Bitter bitter bitter.. there must be a full moon..

for I am feeling the same way about men..heheh

Christopher

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since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

3 posted 1999-09-22 01:42 AM

Sizzzzzle...
the fire is ignited again!
Way to go!

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

4 posted 1999-09-22 02:05 AM

You're on a roll, Dream.
This one cuts deep. Excellent, as always.

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Michael Anderson

And so, being young and dipt in folly
I fell in love with melancholy,
But dreams - of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned, and die:

EAP

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

5 posted 1999-09-22 03:17 AM

Ah Dream, I like this, but fear to comment....

Now when you write, I fear they're aimed my direction....I'm sorry. I do hope I am terribly wrong.

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

Artur Hawkwing
Member

since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

6 posted 1999-09-22 03:30 AM

Nice!

However, I regret opening my mouth so soon. When I read this piece, the distrust seemed inhumanly strong, and I'm not fully sure where the perspective is coming from. But good writing, strong expression.

It hit me hard, I am just not used to reading such dark thoughts. Riven says it all.

[This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 09-22-1999).]

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

7 posted 1999-09-22 08:24 PM

Bitterness touches us all, thank you.

I take that as high tribute Artur, thank you.
I felt the need to release some bitterness and feel I succeeded well.

Artur Hawkwing
Member

since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

8 posted 1999-09-22 08:34 PM

You certainly did, and I'm proud of you for doing it so well.

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