Open Poetry #2 |
Tears |
DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Splashing droplets fall with such liquid grace. Rivulets flow washing away old grief. These tears are the reward of compassion. Molten iron spills white-hot from the forge. Inchoate screams are swallowed down with bile. A bleak, coldness of soul comes creeping in. Such tears are the price of being enraged. A geyser of pain wells up from within. Waterfalls cleanse the heart of it's sorrow. That salty water becomes an ocean. Tears such as these are the outcome of grief. Rain streaks and blurs the windows to the soul. Rain fills you up even as it flows out. Trickles become torrents as the well fills. These tears are the greatest display of love. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
BRAVO! Marvelous imagry. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Certainly fits my mood tonight friend. Well done, as I expect... mushy feelings notwithstanding! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very well done, DreamEvil I love where you took this one. Michael ------------------ But dream - of those who dream as I, Aspiringly, are damned, and die: EAP |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DreamEvil, Excellent you are a master of words. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Well Done my friend.....she will be back sooner than you can imagine. Until then, know that our thoughts are with you. ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Dang buddy, tear jerker! Very well done. |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Nicely done! ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Just a try at blank verse. Thank you for the response. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful imagery, Dream..you are truly a master of words. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
All hail the master!!:: Again beautiful imagery my friend..: ------------------ Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels. ~Isis~ |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
This reads beautifully, Dream, with some very fine imagery and overflowing with emotion. Nice work! ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well, what can I say, except that this is beautiful. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow Dream, I sit here in awe that you've now succeeded in making me cry.... I can't even begin to express the pain this made me feel...welcomed it though...I think there are a few of us here who are hurting in this very way...This is only suppose to happen in the springtime! Everyone finding love all at once ! Yet we all sit here staring blankly at the pain we feel without our lovers near us. Thank you kind sir for sharing this....thank you. ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Again, this was an exercise in blank verse, though I will write more I think. My gratitude to those who have replied. pFF, I am doubly rewarded by this verse. Your enjoyment and inducing the tears it was named for reward me well. [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 09-22-1999).] |
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