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Wendy Junior Member
since 1999-09-10
Posts 16Vermont |
You see without blinking, An allanthus bowing it's Chinese roots; A logical tree, Blooming it's compound traits In fruity dangling adolesence. I see with squinting gaze, A tree of heaven, The branches a chorus of angels Beckoning upward, Outstretched, euphoric. The trunk is the lean sinew of a runner, Bark rippling in perfection. Where you acknowledge industry In the poppy, from the back-alley Opiates to the crusty aromatic ovens, I glimpse faery torches in the blossom, Seductiveness in the spores, The flame of sunsets in the petals. The wide-eyed spook of camoflauge On a butterfly's span, Is nature thinking aloud, You state defensively. But why not a gaudy french brocade, Showy enough for a spoiled monarch? While you seek reason in the cosmos, I will contentedly sit beside you And trace patterns in the stars. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
This is an amazing poem, a very fresh way of looking at the differences between two people and how they experience the world. I especially liked the images: "Blooming it's compound traits In fruity dangling adolesence." "The trunk is the lean sinew of a runner, Bark rippling in perfection." " from the back-alley Opiates to the crusty aromatic ovens," " faery torches in the blossom, Seductiveness in the spores, The flame of sunsets in the petals." And th eending is perfect. This is one of the best poems I have ever read online. Brava! ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
'Tis Symbiosis, my dear friend....   |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderfully written.....I absolutely had to read it with a title like that. Great job! ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Wendy Junior Member
since 1999-09-10
Posts 16Vermont |
Thanks all for your comments on this one. I am especially fond of it, attempting to describe how logistical mixed with creative can make a good match. :-) |
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