My attempts at the Koan form

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Passions in Prose

My attempts at the Koan form

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2011-12-14 11:06 AM

In full moonlight, I watch the doe through my window
Feeding-- it shudders, as it grinds gold offerings;
The television speaks of a midnight bombing in Kabal.
Deer are nocturnal, move at night, the same as insurgents.
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A mature woman doesn't know Im watching;
Bright aftrenoon, I shade my eyes with dark glasses.
I have always admired the grace of willow branches;
Her salt and pepper hair hangs in billows to her waist.

What is nearby, might answer when called,
But voids summon information first, with outer silence.
Cars making passes on double lines are dangerous;
With caution he wonders if she is married.
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Rules of the form > http://www.ehow.com/how_5093172_write-chinese-poetry.html

g7
Junior Member

since 2011-11-15

Posts 20

1 posted 2011-12-15 03:25 PM

am not a huge fan of the study of poetry form...some might find that neanderthal, others might think its common sense. either way, i really like this form of poetry a lot.

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2011-12-15 03:39 PM

Thank you g7
I like this form, but have no idea how it got in the prose forum? I posted it in the poetry forum, and it went here by mistake.
But thank you for reading it, and your reply.
ice

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 2011-12-15 10:49 PM

You did excellent with this form, ice. If you would like it moved, tell me and I'll put it in the forum of your choice.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2011-12-15 11:10 PM

LOL...it's already in Open....

Ford,

this is a great piece...
I need to see if I can
play Chess with you, and
at least try to match this
wonderful form.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2011-12-27 05:26 AM

Thanks, Karilea. I thought I was losing my mind, lol, I knew I had answered these exquisite koans!

Owl

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

6 posted 2012-01-17 07:11 AM

Whoa ice, enjoyed the story, so visual, so in your head.
Nice,
Ms. E

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