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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan 
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Sitting alone in the park,I saw an old dog sitting there too,in the shade of a willow tree a few feet away. His coat was dull and gray, although not dirty and you could see his skin in places where time had rubbed up against him. While I looked, he walked over and layed down beside me. We sat there awhile watching mothers talk while their children played. We watched young girls on roller blades and business men with attaches. I had some peanuts in my pocket so I cracked a couple open, ate one and threw the next over to him. He didn't lunge after it or even look over at me, he just slowly bent his head down, picked it up in his aged and grey mouth, and chewed it while he gazed out over the park. We sat there for a few more minutes, eating peanuts, when I finally spoke to him, "You've had a hard life too, haven't ya fella" He turned his head and looked at me with the saddest brown eyes I think I have ever seen and blinked. After awhile, almost at the same time, we rose to our feet to leave. I slowly put my hand down and gently patted his head. Again, he looked at me and blinked, but I thought I saw his tail move just slightly. He watched me put on my hat and my thread bare coat, although not dirty, and then he walked away. I liked that old dog. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know what? I liked that old dog too. Nice writing. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
His coat was dull and gray, although not dirty and you could see his skin in places where time had rubbed up against him. ~*~ I liked this descriptive part. Brought the imagery of your piece home. Good job! |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
thank you Mysteria and Sunshine for your kind words. LOL i have a place on my head also where time rubbed up against me ..sigh Yoin 9/11 was a inside job. Ask questions, demand answers. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beautiful, poignant write! There is no doubt about him understanding you as well as you understood him. Curious... did you meet him again? Love, Margherita |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
My head's getting to that point, Yoinn. But I try to ignore it, just to keep my grandchildren happy.  |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
thank you Margherita for your reply. ummmm hope this doesn't spoil the poem for you but im afraid its all fiction...no scruffy dog  . lolYes sunshine i agree i think I would do just about anything to keep my little shorties happy too. Yoin |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...James |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Yoin, I really like this. What a wonderful thing it is to be chosen by an old dog to commune for a bit. Alison |
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HAZARD Junior Member
since 2009-06-24
Posts 40ENGLAND |
Very evocative of two guys just hanging out! I especially like the way the dog felt no obligation to acknowledge the peanuts. It reminded of that line from a stranger - 'Gotta Light Buddy?' Followed by a brief nod, as worlds move on. We are all here, man or beast, and we just gotta make the best of it. Life doesn't owe us a damn thing! HAZARD |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Thank you James Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Thank you Alison. Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Thank you Hazard, Glad you picked up on the "two guys hanging out" theme running through the piece. I tried to draw the similarites between the man and the dog. Yoin |
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