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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
My friend fell In love With Russia When it was the Canadian Hockey team That were The good guys It was confusing But made interesting Because he taught me About my naivete Even though He wasn’t trying He already knew That sometimes Bad Wins He sided with the Russians And in a way it was good Because the Canadians Had become mine In that he said he didn’t want them It made me consider Myself My good My bad The scores would go back and forth And I would fight For patriotism I cared about Canada To win It made me feel good To believe I exclaimed a goal And my friend did too Even though it wasn’t Russian And I looked at him He smiled The smile of stubborness Of a cynic Who’s been tickled Into truth And we laughed When he confessed He was just uncertain He wanted to be different With the Russians But wanted Canada To win And that game They actually did So we smiled Threw on our hockey gear Claimed athletes names And re-created the good Over and over With a tennis ball An old net A baseball glove A goalie stick A hockey stick And the vulnerability And excitement Of a happy ending That we both knew Was tenuous And who’s power Needed to be harnessed Now Immediately For our beliefs Before it wore out And reality Descended With its gray sheet And flattened its Bright colors [This message has been edited by patchoulipumpkin (edited 01-26-2000).] |
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jenni Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 478Washington D.C. |
patch-- this is an awesome piece! just excellent... creative, insightful, fascinating, a joy to read. loved your last two stanzas especially. very, very well done! jenni |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
A brilliant anecdote to illustrate intellectual and spiritual awakening... Wouldn't change a thing |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
I Agree with all of the above! Fabulous work patch...truly a great read! The close is a powerful wrap...EXTREME KUDOS! |
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Earthtones Junior Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 10 |
Nice one man, flowed all the way from the begining to the end.If I was to relate this poem to a movie, Stand by Me would be the one of choice.(let's go Bruins!) |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Again, Patch, a very good piece of work! Go Wings! |
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