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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
The following haiku is, among other things, a puzzle. Can you see what I'm talking about, or should I build in more hints? (Explanation of origin of haiku to follow after input.) HAIKU Holding his sticks out Under two feet of fresh snow He waits for spring thaw. |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
Its a sapling...your talking about a new-last spring tree...right? |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Ted: Perhaps this is a Haiku about the Haiku. The two feet of snow represents the first two lines of the Haiku. The meaning of the Haiku is the sapling and the third line the twigs. The thawing represents the gradual, eventual understanding of the philosophical meanings of the Haiku. Or maybe the sticks are the Haiku, the sapling the meaning, and the snow the meaning's obscurity. Just wild guesses here so stop laughing.  Jim [This message has been edited by jbouder (edited 01-19-2000).] |
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Hawk183 Member
since 1999-12-24
Posts 130 |
Ted, I really like Jim's idea here...although if I was a betting man I would go with Haze  A fun piece nonetheless! Hawk |
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Kirk T Walker Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 357Liberty, MO |
Here is my solution to the puzzle: A Canadian rock n' roll drummer, had a few too many drinks, stumbled outside after a gig, passed out, face down in the snow. Then a sudden and violent blizzard covers his body with snow. He freezes to death, his hands frozen, clasping his drum"sticks". He waits for the snow to thaw so they can find his corpse. Not really, but I didn't have as good a guess as haze or Jim. I would say the title Brave Little ****** leans the poem toward Brave Little Tree, but what do I know? I thought it was a drummer. ha ha Nice poem. |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Ah, come on guys. This one's obvious. It's a snowman caught in a blizzard who has a Fruedian death complex thing going. Brad |
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J.L. Humphres Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 201Alabama |
It's a what if piece about if Sonny Bono would have been lost and not found 'til the thaw.I don't see where the title fits in with the theme though. J.L.H. Jason I...I have seen the best minds of my generation... --Allen Ginsberg |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Well, here's my logic. (yeah, right) There are eight stars after "Bold Little", and there's a kid's story, "Brave Little Toaster", ahhhh .... a camper holding sticks out for cooking over the campfire, gets buried in an avalanche with only the sticks showing. I know that's not it, but.... |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Well, here's my logic. (yeah, right) There are eight stars after "Bold Little", and there's a kid's story, "Brave Little Toaster", ahhhh .... a camper holding sticks out for cooking over the campfire, gets buried in an avalanche with only the sticks showing. I know that's not it, but.... I think it is really saplings, also. |
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Wordshaman Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 110Illinois, USA |
Well, you've got the drummer part right...but it's actually Motley Crue's drummer, Tommy Lee. It's a poem about the Crue's late-eighties drug abuse. The snow is actually cocaine. It's a poem about trying to get in from the cold of isolated drug abuse, into Pamela Anderson's (Lee's)arms. Like that was so hard...c'mon guys! |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
I was going to post an explanation this morning, but reading these guesses is *such* fun. I guess I'll post the clearer version and the origin story this evening. Let me admit that *one* of you got it (almost). And here I thought it was *obvious*! |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
The first snow of the season was just a sprinkling, but it *was* snow. I bundled up and went out, and while my wife held my baby up to the inside of the window, I collected snow from ten square feet, and created her first snowman. (Good for you, Brad.) It loomed a good four inches high, and was a masterpiece. That night it *really* snowed. In the morning I looked out over a level sheet of two-foot-deep snow. I couldn't help imaging my poor snowman trying to keep his spirits up under all that, and so I wrote my haiku. Brave little snowman, Buried in two feet of snow Waiting for spring thaw. I've played with it a lot in the last week, fitting it together in a dozen ways. Renewed input would be nice. (I know, I know -- you think he's had it. But shhhhh,*he* doesn't know that. And anyway, don't we believe in miracles?) |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Touche' Mr. Ted. Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
But now I've changed my mind and decided that I was mistaken, and Jim was right from the beginning -- the real answer to the first posted haiku IS the haiku itself. Sorry to have misled you. Bye. |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Smarta**! |
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Wordshaman Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 110Illinois, USA |
Tommy Lee's gonna be heartbroken. |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
I refuse the truth. I have to go with Tommy Lee, its the only answer that sits well with me. Kudos Shaman, you are on target. |
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Wordshaman Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 110Illinois, USA |
lol--thank you. |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Very touching story, Ted (really), but why would a snowman wait to be melted, unless he was suicidal, and wanted to be put out of his misery? (Just like Brad said) |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
Geez, you guys give up so easy. I packed him *really* hard, so he'll melt a few minutes leter than the rest of the snow, and before that I'll have plopped him in the frig. You fellows have no *faith.* (Well, isn't trusting in God and the afterlife about as realistic as that? (And I duck quickly to avoid . . .")) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
ROFL...I think I'll stay out of this snowball fight Interesting haiku...I'd like to be as logical in my thinking as Jim...but I saw a sapling  |
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Kevin Taylor Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 185near Vancouver, BC, Canada |
It's a secret message... just look... Holding his sticks out Under two feet of fresh snow He waits for spring thaw. ... becomes the beautiful Thaw spring for waits he - Snow fresh of feet two under Out sticks his holding! Very nicely done I say! ROFL Kevin "Poetry is, at once, what you get... and how you got there." |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
NO, NO, NO, Kevin. You've got it all wrong! It's: Holding out his sticks Under snow of two fresh feet He thaw waits spring for LSHIFOOMCAHMHOTWS [Laughed So Hard I Fell Out Of My Chair And Hit My Head On The Window Sill] Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Wordshaman Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 110Illinois, USA |
An alternate writing for this piece: Tommy Lee coked out Lonely and hazy in snow Waiting for the thaw LSHMHBU (Laughed so hard my head blew up) Wordshaman |
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Vincent Spaulding Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 59 |
I pictured a skier, who couldn't wait for the season to be over. I can identify with that, since I hate most of my hobbies. But warmheart's interpretation made the most sense. I liked Ted's second version better. The average reader could understand it. And I, by coincidence, am an average reader. |
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