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Critical Analysis #1

Morbid

Diamond
New Member

since 1999-09-19

Posts 9
E. Falmouth, MA. USA

0 posted 1999-10-17 04:51 PM

I wrote this poem last nite..
It's called Morbid (Don't ask)

Filled with
poetry,
imagery.
Filled with
symmetry,
and sympathy.
Filled with
hate,
anger,
frustaration.
Filled with so
much emotion
I feel like a stranger.
Filled with
so many memories,
and loved ones
6-feet under in cemeteries.
I've done drugs,
and lived a life of a thug.
Filled with
tears
and so many
fears.
Filled with
emotions,
and so many
notions.
I seem to be afraid of my own
shadow
but no matter where I go
my anger seems to
follow.

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"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment."
-Buddha

roxane
Senior Member

since 1999-09-02

Posts 505
us

1 posted 1999-10-18 11:20 PM

i like the confusion that seems to emanate from this poem, but i think you could get your point across better if you focused on one aspect of your confusion, like your anger. maybe a poem about your anger and how that has affected the feelings you put forth in this poem would be less confusing.

Diamond
New Member

since 1999-09-19

Posts 9
E. Falmouth, MA. USA

2 posted 1999-10-19 11:48 AM

I entirely agree

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