To be wanted (For you, sylphid)

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To be wanted (For you, sylphid)

mere enigma
Junior Member

since 2001-01-29

Posts 18

0 posted 2001-02-10 05:09 AM

They always looked at you,
and I felt awkward
and fat.
You intrigued them
with your openness
and liveliness
and laughter
while I remained shy
and secretive.
I always wondered why
they looked your way
or asked for you
on the phone
proposed to you,
changed religions,
and bought you expensive gifts:
silk scarves and dresses,
jewelry
(and shoes!)
I longed
to be wanted
like you.

I have grown.
I am woman now,
in league
with my sensual self.
Suddenly
they started coming,
calling, asking
and I know what it is
to be wanted
and I know your pain.
What it is to
want to crawl in a hole
with a bottle of something fiery
and disappear again.
What it is
to be wanted
and not desire.
To look in the mirror
and see nothing.

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

1 posted 2001-02-10 06:43 PM

I really like the shift here (except for the last three lines which I don't understand) but ya gotta give me more. I suppose there is a certain charm to the short lines here, "I felt fat," and such but I really would like more description and exploration of the theme beyond the dichotomy.

Still, I found this a nice shift from the usual 'feeling ostracized' genre.

Brad

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