Critical Analysis #1 |
Suicidal Torture |
Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Please give any suggestions or comments on this poem please. I would greatly appreciate it! She stands still with her emotions ready to react in a death-defining way, Beneath the panic-stricken body, bits of the bloodthirsty cliff break away from the sight. Fear grasps a hold of her mind, over powering the strongest of her will power, and death opens it's gateway, It's gateway to agony, sweat pours down the crazed structure as the hand of mortality reaches out to fight; To fight to end the psychotic life of the innocent girl, who has now taken it's hand. She shuts her eyes and the angel of death thrusts her over the edge. She breathes her last breath, thinks her last thought, and dives into the nothingness below, only the sand. The devil has won, he has pushed her over the ledge. The fear and the sadness are gone, and now death wraps her up in her favourite blanket. |
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Jay_Jay Junior Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 38San Diego, CA. USA |
I am not the critical type person because I like everything I read, but I can say I think that this is very well written. ------------------ Never allow life to get in the way of living... |
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