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Lelly Shae Junior Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 32 |
There,now its better... THE SABLE STALLIONS i gaze with my frosty eyes across the daintily sugared plains and see a fleet of raven horses,no longer captive in their reins. their tails ripple and whip in the bitter,bitter wind their muscles clench and twitch,dance beneath their skin. I hear their feet roar like thunder against the snow-white winter fields and flakes flit up from the ground from beneath their spastic heels. Their such intricate creatures,black,like the center of the night coated in constellations with a brilliant,starry white. it bleeds through their form,this freedom with which their born, they have genuine euphoria,their never morose or forlorn With this,I stop to wonder,with great sadness in my veins of being that raven horse breaking free from his reins flying out into the air,his feet barely on the ground being without any care and not hearing a single sound. Still,I watch from my perch as another snowstorm begins and the horses are still running,undaunted by the wind. ------------------ "Time flies like an arrow,fruit flies like a banana"--Groucho Marx (ha ha) [This message has been edited by Lelly Shae (edited 09-23-1999).] |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
That was beautiful...and not only because I love horses lol. Enough description that I could actually picture the scene, but not so much that it bored me...I like it! |
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Lelly Shae Junior Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 32 |
Thank you  But,I am revising it,I wasn'thappy with it so I will post the FINAL product tongight...it will be even better ------------------ "Time flies like an arrow,fruit flies like an arrow"--Groucho Marx (ha ha) |
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