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The Apparition's Hollow Knell
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The Apparition's Hollow Knell |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
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*okay, so I'm back sooner than expected...all comments are welcome! An apparition’s hollow knell tolls eerily in thought, swarming through the sable gowns softly encircling those still grasped by time. Mahogany splashed by tumbling saffron sun and adorned by tiger lilies Becomes now her passageway to meadows stretching through Forever’s hallowed reign. A body withered by disease now resting breathless, wrapped in waves of quiet dark, Holds no more promise for a spirit meant to climb to where the rainbows fly. A sorrowed ring of church bells drifts solemnly within and although the moments hold me entwined in mortal sinew I know that once the phantoms call and whisper in my blood that I will hold you...for always. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Janie Member
since 2000-08-13
Posts 158 |
I don't really know how to critique this piece. I don't have any complaints and I believe I understand it. Good imagery. Good job! Janie |
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Tim Gouldthorp Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 170 |
Alwye, I had a bit of trouble with the shortness of the second line in the first stanza. I like 'whisper in my blood' particularly. -Tim |
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