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Falls Away |
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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
I feel bad We all feel so bad It's the normal thing to do So let me fall away from life I've fallen from your grace Sometimes the sun wilts like a stale candy cain I am bruised by its rays It doesn't matter anyways Tell me how you took away America I see a patriot with money in his hand How can I believe in anything of importance I have such a task to complete Don't ask for favors I repulsed by your ignorance Be blase and proud Rub my nose in all I've done wrong I've lived and died by your standards So maybe you were right I only have a mortal parent Why should I sit and fear it? Why should I hold my tongue It only makes my mouth dry I feel bad We all feel so bad It's the polite thing to do So let me fall away from life I've fallen from your grace After a time a wound heals None other than my scars appear You always said my poetry was bad You always said I should study more in Math What does it matter if I say I think all I do is alright with me I might have dignity I never had to use it so I don't know if it is real Keep your distance don't catch my disease You might be more considerate then Of all things this hurts the worst: You made me think you cared for me Another fake empathetic ear I'm just chatterbox So just wind me up and let me writhe It should be good clean family fun I feel bad I know that this has no structure what so ever but I wanted to write it like this, like the emotional halluencination that it was to feel it. I wanted it to confuse as I was confused. ------------------ "Come night, come darkness, for you cannot come too soon or stay too long in such a place as this." Charles Dickens roxane |
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rogen of the night Junior Member
since 1999-09-07
Posts 29 |
Verry good confusing at some parts but good none the less,I have read most of your poems and they have all turned out good keep up the good work. ------------------ The wise man is the storm prays God,not for safety from danger,but for deliverance from fear.It is the storm within which endangers him,not the storm without. ~~Ralh Waldo Emerson~~ |
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