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How Miraculous it was

bsblount
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since 2000-06-11

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0 posted 2000-06-22 12:45 PM

This is my latest revisement of my poem.  Please give some more crits if at all possible.  I find them very helpful and reassuring.

How Miraculous It Was

I recall how miraculous it was
In the slow passing seconds of the night
When time is worth wasting away
And I completely give up on the fight

I let the memories ingulf my thoughts
Sweet memories permeated by pain
Grasping disparately for some comfort.
Receiving nothing but constant disdain

I recall how miraculous it was
Feeling reborn in your loving embrace
Ultimately helpless between your lips
Where the vision of my life fell in place

I recall all the earth-shattering moments
That the rest of the world vanished away
Just us together in each others arms
Where I thought I would always stay

I view our memories as  wild flowers
Pervading a garden in constant growth
Some blossoms smell sweet, while some have sharp thorns
And I choose to gather them both

As I arrange this bouquet  of my thoughts
I take a moment  of reflective pause
To summon a smile and dry a shed tear
And recall how miraculous it was

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