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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
lit by her ivory beauty he stood and he knew that nothing should be but this moment and she Uta Lotharingia "Wir wollen nicht Wert und Sinn ... wir wollen Unwert und Unsinn" Raoul Hausmann |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Short and eloquent. Reminds me of a statue I saw in the museum - the essence of female perfection in alabaster....  Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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Elyse Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 414Apex (think raleigh) NC |
 i like this one, but why call it "falling"? especially with short poems, i find it fun to use the title to tell something important about the poem. not neccesarily important, but, ya know. you could do anything. play with it, see how it goes. just a suggestion  luv Elyse |
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jenni Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 478Washington D.C. |
lotharingia-- this piece has a nice, almost snapshot-like feel; i enjoyed it. thanks for posting it! jenni |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
I loved this...and wish I could write so much in so few words. A beautiful image you have created here. Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Kris, thanks, you're sweet. It's such a wonderful feeling when people like what you write! Elyse, the title 'falling' is meant to imply falling in love, but I didn't want to call it that because that sounds tacky. It is also meant to represent the feeling the 'he' in the poem has when he sees the object of his desire. But you are right, I wasn't that happy with it myself, but couldn't think of anything better. Jenni, I'm really glad you use the term snapshot! My present aim is to write a load of poems that behave like "snapshots" of people's lives, one for every day of the year. I'm pleased you liked it! Uta Lotharingia "Wir wollen nicht Wert und Sinn ... wir wollen Unwert und Unsinn" Raoul Hausmann |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
p.s. JP, I liked your idea about the statue, BTW, Thanks. I forgot to mention that before (I think). I'm afraid I'm not very together today (3 of hrs sleep does me in). Uta Lotharingia "Wir wollen nicht Wert und Sinn ... wir wollen Unwert und Unsinn" Raoul Hausmann |
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