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captaincargo Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 109Corning, N.Y. U.S.A. |
Oh evil day if I were sullen One shade the more, one ray the less I spend it mellow and softened as with sunset glow a song that has been sung. And the story that has been told My growing unto you O fond, O fool, O drunken view Unto thine, mark me, and thy innocence with beauty fraught came late Though every diamond, hand or in her breast how sweet to love or pains of love be sweeter far Say not a womans love is bought or hearts lost, and paid with tears again A coward from loves flight She has laughed as softly as if she's sighed And I glance lightly A measure that mocks me in a space what matter if I go lame love hath it's treasure I will sing, sigh for love is done. Cap. Or richer joys than clay can feel? "Clay" Edward Verrall Lucas < !signature--> Cap. Carg. [This message has been edited by captaincargo (edited 04-02-2000).] |
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Malcolm Coleman Junior Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 24United Kingdom |
Well...Although I didn't understand everything in your poem, the overall impression was one of depression. ******************************* Though every diamond, hand or in her breast how sweet to love or pains of love be sweeter far ******************************* This was the most confusing part of the poem, although that may just be me!! In short, In my opinion, you have good word usage, but you tend to go overboard trying to sound "profound". This may not be true, but it is how I see it. no offence meant Malcolm Coleman ** It seems I've waited years for this day to end. - Ronan Harris Thanks for reading, hope you're still awake. |
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Diana B Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 97 |
i am captivated by the delicate and emotional phrases in this piece they keep drawing me back to reread it i am having trouble understanding the work completely as malcolm mentioned and do hope that you might be willing to help me out i really want to know so i can read it with a fuller understanding and capture the fulll essence of the work. "Say not a womans love is bought or hearts lost, and paid with tears again A coward from loves flight She has laughed as softly as if she's sighed" this is the part that confuses me the most not sure which way to turn this one |
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