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Christmas Earrings In April
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Christmas Earrings In April |
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AdozNroses New Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 7 |
Christmas Earrings In April Veronica A Cech The site of them laying there rivets me in place And then it comes unbidden the image of your face Festive laughter from another time hangs heavy in the air Just as a Robin chirps to remind me Its not December and you're not there Happy memories reach out to me they want my embrace I can't bear to let them near me yet My heart's still a broken place They lay there in the dust pretty red and green I scoop them up and drop them in a drawer to be unseen Christmas earrings in April seem so out of place I wish my heart could say the same for the image of your face |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
To 12~ Nice poem. I think you could delete the words "just as" in line 7 and it would read even better. Good job. bboog |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
With a little work on the meter, it would be very good..welcome to the family! Check your email!  [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 03-25-2000).] |
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AdozNroses New Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 7 |
Thank you both for your advice, and your warm welcome. I have been offline for almost a year, but I am back! :} "Even with insects some can sing, some can't" ~~ Kobayashi Issa |
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