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Oh well....Arachnid

BSC

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since 2000-02-04

Posts 2919
New York, USA

0 posted 2000-03-24 01:04 PM

I couldn't miss the intriguing web,
Glistening, encrusted with dew,
The spider's perfect weaving,
Reflecting the setting sun's hue.
It went from rose to railing,
The shape an architect's dream,
Ornately designed in the corner,
Clinging fast to the old wooden beam.
While the master of this creation,
Waited silently for his prey,
With his enticing lure beckoning,
I ran for the insect spray !!!

[This message has been edited by BSC (edited 03-25-2000).]

Tony Di Bart
Member

since 2000-01-26

Posts 160
Toronto, Canada

1 posted 2000-03-25 02:11 AM

BSC

I read your poem and laughed a little. Especialy the last line. I think though that some of the lines are a little cumbersome.

THanks
See Ya

AdozNroses
New Member

since 2000-03-25

Posts 7

2 posted 2000-03-25 03:59 PM

CSB,

I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. It paints a beautiful picture of one of nature's most beautiful gems. And it made me smile at the end.

~ Roses ~

AdozNroses
New Member

since 2000-03-25

Posts 7

3 posted 2000-03-25 04:00 PM

BSC,

ACK.. my first post and I typoed your name! Please forgive!!

~ Roses ~

whipsnade
Junior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 40

4 posted 2000-04-02 10:29 PM

Bsc
very nice,elevating life's prosaic in lovely descriptive verse.
whipsnade

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