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Critical Analysis #1

March Morning

Ted Reynolds
Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 331

0 posted 2000-03-21 03:50 PM

Bright sun out at last, twig shadows crossing like jackstraws,
Squirrels cussing their little hearts out over territory,
A sparrow just outside the window teasing the cats,
Tang of something in the air, got to check it out myself,
If you think I'll stay inside writing poetry at a time like this,
You don't grasp the priorities.

haze
Senior Member

since 1999-11-03

Posts 528
Bethlehem, PA USA

1 posted 2000-03-21 04:33 PM

An excellent point.
Sounds like a beautiful spring day

I like your descriptions of the activity-it seems vibrant and full of the colors of possibility even though you mention none.

jbouder
Member Elite

since 1999-09-18

Posts 2534
Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash

2 posted 2000-03-23 09:34 PM

Ted:

I just couldn't let this one slip through the cracks. I agree with the point you made but when I first read this we were experiencing quite a bit of rainfall in Pennsylvania's Susquahanna Valley. I agree with your point, by the way. The past few days have been beautiful in PA and, as a consequence, I haven't touched my quill during that time.

Thanks for the read.

Jim

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

3 posted 2000-03-25 02:02 AM

thank you for always commenting on my work...here i am to return the favor

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i loved this poem!!!

")such beautiful vivid images about spring

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i like the way u express ur love for spring through another interest--writing poetry...it makes the reader know the poet on a deeper level,something that u don't always find

BTW,i have replied to the post For Ted Reynolds...pls do read it sometime(It's getting buried somewhere.LOL)as i love to continue the discussion on Haiku..

tom
Member

since 2000-01-26

Posts 90
s/w penna u.s.a.

4 posted 2000-03-25 08:09 AM

Ted
As it should be.Nice piece of work.
Though,I would have used barking instead of
cussing,softens it up a bit.
If the rain stays away today,I'm outa here!

tom

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