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captaincargo
Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 109
Corning, N.Y. U.S.A.

0 posted 2000-02-12 05:42 PM

Tell me children, what is love?
Does it abide in little paths
Adorned with mossy gloves?

Or is it freshened meadow wilds,
With swaying rainbow blossoms?

Yet greenwood trees say love to me
I hear a merry note,
Of scarlet birds and whistling words
From cheery dulcet throats.

Yes love is this and so much more,
A rocky crag, a sunlit shore,
All glorious and winsome.

Now spread your wings my dewy babes,
And seek your calling pleasure.
Do your work with joy and pour,
Loves boundless gift, our treasure.

Cap.

Cap. Carg.

Poertree
Senior Member

since 1999-11-05

Posts 1359
UK

1 posted 2000-02-12 06:06 PM

Capt what a joyous poem to bid my day farewell and waft sweet perfumed dreams through my aching mind.....

Ohh the idea of the chief fairy dispensing the lesson on love to the little fairies and then sending them out into the world is so delicious ... and your word choice is so light and airy .. just like a fairy.

Liked in particular:

"Mossy gloves" did you mean foxgloves .. they are mossy inside the petals ..

"dewy babes"

A poem to gladden the heart Captain C ... makes me feel Spring is just round the next Oak tree ..... and that is WHY i liked it.....

Tra la la ..

Philip

[This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 02-12-2000).]

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

2 posted 2000-02-13 01:29 AM

Cap,
Sounds nice but just a bit too winsome for my taste. Actually, I can put up with fairies in poetry if you expand on some of their traits, make them more complex than what you've got going here. Play around with some of the ideas here and see what happens (what about a fairy mafia?)

Brad

warmhrt
Senior Member

since 1999-12-18

Posts 1563

3 posted 2000-02-13 02:50 AM

Cap,
Brad has a right to his opinion, but he needs soften that rough exterior a bit.

I thought this was delightful...fairies, flowers, love, birds and trees. Never heard of a greenwood tree, though. Now, dogwoods, with their floating blossoms...
Anyway, I know you meant this to be a light, airy, and beautiful, and you succeeded.
Nice job, Cap

Kristine

Thoughts of a dry brain in a dry season ~ T.S. Eliot

Poertree
Senior Member

since 1999-11-05

Posts 1359
UK

4 posted 2000-02-13 06:00 AM

Don't listen to the anti-fairy brigade Capt ... I love the fairies .....

P

PS (Even in the cold light of morning ..lol)

captaincargo
Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 109
Corning, N.Y. U.S.A.

5 posted 2000-02-14 12:36 PM

Brad, Fairy Mafia?? Hmmmm, no I don't think so.

Now , if you had said "Biker Fairies from Beta Reticuli"... maybe.

Cap.

Cap. Carg.

Not A Poet
Member Elite

since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

6 posted 2000-02-14 02:38 PM

Hey Cap, I'm with the majority here. This is delightfully light and cheerful. I can't point to any specific thing which makes me like it other than the general feeling it leaves me with.

Well done.

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