Critical Analysis #1 |
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lily Junior Member
since 1999-12-27
Posts 16united states |
So abysmally bestial and provoked benevolence turned its back and ran away from this peevish creature forever sitting, stationary waiting for fortune and luck to lightly rap at the door or breeze by casually only needing a momentary glimpse of contentment, but never receiving it pain materializes and slowly drips down the cheek of this morose human fists clench tighter than ever thought possible and fly at walls tears roll incessantly and spreading their salty misery over taut and worn flesh limbs fly, lashing out at the world for all the pain it has inflicted neverending torture, unbearable misery in one trusty shot out of a cold barrel, the world bows down and clenches the dusty bottom of a long trenchcoat compressed paper burns less easily lily davison |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
lily: i absolutely LOVE the last two lines... disturbing though they may be, i simply adore them... the imagery you use is quite good, though i did have a bit of trouble discerning where one thought stopped and another one started... also, perhaps i'm ill-informed, but i dont understand the fist-pounding-wall imagery there... is it meant to be completely symbolic (in the form of "lashing out") or does it have some literal significance as well? sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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