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soul drifter
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Colorado

0 posted 2021-07-08 12:03 PM


Ordinary Day

Worn out shoes
broken radiator blues
the telephone is in league with the television
the widow's brand new
with the same old view
I'm looking at the weather with some derision
the record player needs a new needle
so my favorite song can't come out to play
it's just another ordinary day

Love is lost
luck of the coin toss
just staring as my clothes go round and round
late night laundromat
toe in a rat trap
I'm missing her like a treasure buried underground
I can't hold on to one measly buck
these holes in my pockets and I've fallen away
it's just another ordinary day

This day is like any other
ain't nothing unusual about this ennui
I'd tell you a lot about love brother
but the sweet words escape me
have I anything left to say
on this completely ordinary day

Screen door tear
so much in need of repair
the smell of impending rain is rising up
heart full of hollow
love is the marrow
and my bones sound in tune with my empty cup
wish I could remember the tune
she was singing in her crooked way
it's just another ordinary day

This day is like any other
and the calendar is lousy with them
nothing new to report mother
there's no need to ask me again
now I watch the time fall away
on this completely ordinary day

Have I anything left to say
as I watch the time fall away
on this totally normal
utterly typical
run of the mill
completely ordinary average day
no way
no way

“I want to do with you what spring does with the cherry trees.” —Pablo Neruda

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2islander2
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by the sea
1 posted 2021-07-09 12:35 PM


beautiful poetry, ordinary day can be inspiring for the soul, like your poem, loved my reading

yann

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2 posted 2021-07-09 01:27 PM


soul drifter...Really enjoyed your take on an ordinary day. Thanks for sharing...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

wordwizard
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since 2003-09-08
Posts 483
on the way to next world
3 posted 2021-07-09 07:09 PM


This is a delightful disillusionment with the ordinary put into some enjoyable verse and clever rhyming couplets...much enjoyed, soul drifter.Very good summarizing verse at the end!


Michael
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4 posted 2021-07-11 11:34 AM


Wow, this is a lackadaisical nod at apathy one can get absorbed into.  I feel you on this one.
augustsky
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midwest US
5 posted 2021-07-16 08:49 PM


Souls, You've made "Ordinary"..Extraordinary!

I Loved this dear Poet

Sky~

'Excuse me.. while I kiss the sky'
J.H.

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