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Karma's Revenge
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Karma's Revenge |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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you can’t give what you’ve never known she played hide and seek with his feelings scaring others beyond any semblance of recognition ached for those sweet wines of rare fruits something she drempt of from her desk of pain although she loved to sit in the rain tossing fear in the air and catching it to embrace only knowing the hand of moments, constricted the intensity of knowing full well how fragile life and our capabilities lean towards unknown emotions, harvesting crops & dreams dressed up in a hunger that never rests sunlight’s purpose crying for summer's best running circles around anxious thoughts But she just can’t skip high enough over those stones of blood which moved her dress towards senseless overtones something she couldn’t give something she’d never known an external song, becomes her disease sad how she never knew, illumination screams yet grasped the long low sighs of trees a crazy enthusiast was her pathetic soul and all she drove down under that weighed emotional to some lower class of physical activity one from which she will never return or see she is road rage running late on a Monday morning leaving all who enter, kickboxing determination into a room she’s designed with glue sticks and scotch tape and still she plays a victim's beat |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Wow! You have some magnificent lines here, too many to list.  ~L |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
This line seems to be the sum of myriad parts of what reads like an abstract of streaming thoughts while behind the wheel of an automobile whose windshield is being pummeled by swarms of Mayflies and everyone else on the road is blaming you with an extended finger... quote:...or not. ...just bein' Bluesy |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Lori, thank you kindly for taking the time to read and comment. Blusey, yeah, she gave me the finger all right...amazing how one person can negatively affect so many lives. Thank yo for the read and comment. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is very powerful writing. Maybe we all see a bit of our selves woven within the lines. The way you weaved words, LeeJ, was masterful. You made my morning! Alison |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Very nice, and haunting. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
thanks to everyone for kindly reading and commenting...enjoy your day. |
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Poet In Pink Senior Member Posts 1066 MI |
Karma....Sometimes it really sux...Well...Depending on which end of it you are on lol Wonderful write LeeJ ~ I always so enjoy the way you pen your thoughts and emotions Alana[This message has been edited by Poet In Pink (11-08-2017 07:09 PM).] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
'she is road rage running late on a Monday morning' God, what a line! A whole poem in a single sentence! LOVE IT! j. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
WOW! One must contemplate these fine words with a cup of hot coffee, and a slice of cheese cake. Very nice writing LeeJ, as always. JL |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Thank you JWesley, so nice of you to read and comment.... JL, so good to see you in there again....hope all is well and thank you for reading and commenting. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I could read this over and over and never tire of the words or thoughts it brings to mind... "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
"and still she plays a victim's beat" What a line to end this fabulos poem, which stands out among the rest. That is how what so many of us play. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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kevinjtaylor Member Posts 61 British Columbia, Canada |
The pause and then the final line. Wrapped up in a bow. |
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