Long lonely summers : could I call this a haiku?

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Long lonely summers : could I call this a haiku?

chickoo007
Member

since 2007-11-06

Posts 70
India

0 posted 2018-11-08 05:12 AM

Hey guys.... I think it's been years since I posted here. Need a little help... Could I call the lines below a haiku?

Long lonely summers,
In the barren lands of heart-
Rain, her smile brings.

Love,
AT

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2018-11-10 08:36 AM

Well...hmmmm...I'm no expert but I think you probably could because you got the syllables right and the nature references. But to get real technical, I'd say no because I think each line has to be able to stand on its own and it has to be completely about nature. Poems with the same syllable pattern about anything else are called senyru. ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2018-11-10 10:51 AM

Lori has it right. This is a Senryu.

A Haiku is all about nature.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

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