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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2020-07-26 02:53 AM



They placed you
in my arms and I held your eyes with mine
wondered if their wide blue stare
could understand the sudden softness in my brown ones.
You smelled of new clothes
sipped milk
late night feeding
and the education
of newly made parents.
There was plenty of time to get to know you.
I've never been a mother
but held plenty your age.
Support the back and head
simultaneously.
Hold you with your face out
so I can watch the expression
as your new eyes
soak in and react
to the world around you.
Smile for the camera
and wonder if I'm still doing this right
as your soft little body
wiggles in attempt to trust yourself
with me.
There will be plenty of time for me to earn your trust.
I reach
with my mind
in fast forward
to which Auntie personality
will suit you best.
I thought we had time
and now I try to appreciate
those few moments
and try not to stand with anger
over
moments stolen from us
by end of life
two months into your journey.
The tears,
listless lost young parents,
flower monuments perched on wood and wire,
stuffed animals you should have been happily slobbering on,
and a tiny white box
cradling forever closed eyes
and a suit around unnatural stillness.
None of it fits
with
the briefest glimpse of light
introduced into my world
upon meeting you
and being comforted
by the time I thought we'd have.




"How much is real? So much to question
An epidemic of the mannequins
Contaminating everything"

Stone Sour


[This message has been edited by Temptress (07-26-2020 03:53 AM).]

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2020-07-26 07:11 AM


So what was the challenge? To see who could plunge a knife deepest into my heart? You are killing me here. It is unfortunate how painfully well written this is. My heart literally aches. Tissue alert! ~L

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US
2 posted 2020-07-26 11:32 AM


Temptress, I think you more than met the
'Challenge'. Beautifully written, & there
is no greater sorrow than the loss of a child.

Sky~

Sometimes..Miracles are just good people
with kind hearts~

Starmcneil 1955
Member
Posts 174
Alberta, Canada
3 posted 2020-07-26 12:23 PM


Oh my gosh...you take one through so many deep feelings ending with tears and such a strong sense of loss...Temptress...I remember your work from years gone by...you still use words to touch heart and soul
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
4 posted 2020-07-26 12:47 PM


Jenn, I honestly didn’t know if you’d be able to do this, thought it still might be too soon.  Thought you might even think awfully of me for the phrase I gave you.  I am pleased that you did do it though, and through all the pain I know you and your family are experiencing right now I was only hoping I could slip you a reminder that not only was looking into you nephew’s eyes the briefest glimpse of light, but maybe that life itself is light, and shine’s brightest in the eyes of a newborn. For those who realize this, we do have the power to gain back some of the shine the world might otherwise steal from us permanently.  

Might heart aches with and for you, Jenn.  Humanity doesn’t process loss of life well.  It always comes as a shock, even where it is seen coming and there is time to prepare.  How much more it is multiplied when it sneaks in like this.  “None of it fits” indeed.


Michael

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