Open Poetry #50 |
Constellations |
Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Constellations Constellations finger drawn in tender caress we are skin shivered and love made |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Mz, This is Smooth & Sweet as Honey dripping the page.. Love it Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
exquisite, inspiration can be a caress, thanks for the tribute yann |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I love the beautiful simplicity here. The mood of it comes across well, and leaves a smile. Since you said you welcome constructive criticism I would offer one suggestion. Please remember I'm not a professional. "Tender" is very commonly used in describing a caress. It does fit into this nicely, but I'd like to see what other way you could describe a caress. "How much is real? So much to question |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
@augustsky. Thanks for the reply, glad you liked it. @2islander2. Thanks for the response. @Temptress. Thanks for the feedback. Always appreciate constructive criticism, especially when I agree with it. Though it fits “tender” does feel a little bland here. |
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