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Desert Alliteration |
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David Young New Member Posts 8 |
Wanted to post a poem of mine written a while back Desert Alliteration Streaming sun blistering, Storms thundering on the horizon, Sounding off with anticipation. Streams of dust baking, Sterile scene bleached off white. Fast moving wall of water, Flooding from mountains hideouts From torrential downpours comes Foaming suffocation, Fearsome flow of devastation. Blossoming desert of renewed life, Brilliant colors of revitalization, Budding cactus flowers, Bursting hidden vegetation, Brief display of a desert paradise. Winds drying up moisture, Washing away tear drops, Whispers again hiding, Weather blaring in heat strokes, Wounded plants again wilting. Night skies so crystal clear, Never has so many stars been visible. Noises from animals awakened, Noting the evening chill, Nuzzling their existence. Full moon rising to coyote howls. Flames from a campfire crackling, Frames of words creating vivid images, Finding truth in someone’s expressions. For tranquility is in the moisture of living. D.Lester Young 3/6/2003 |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Spent a good 5 years working in the desert. Though I may never have truly adapted, I did bear witness to a lot of the happenings you represent here. Everything that occurs in the desert does so with its own brand of urgency. You capture this well. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A great scenic tour of your memories, David. I truly enjoyed this...thank you! |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Poet David, Loved this..felt I was there, & your last stanza brought it home.  Enjoyed, Sky~ I am pieces of all the moments I've had |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
This was my first time reading a poem like this and I enjoyed it very much. I especially liked your last line where you wrote: "For tranquility is in the moisture of living." That was a very powerful image and thought for me. Thanks for taking me there. ~L |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I like alliteration. I've never used it like this, line after line. It's an interesting technique. And of course this makes me see the desert. It brought to mind, strongly, a time on a highway in New Mexico, flat and you could see miles. Big gray storm clouds threatening from every direction. Thanks for bringing that one back to me. |
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