The Rain Upon Her Window Pain: The Hope Of A Hopelessly Lost Love...

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Open Poetry #50

The Rain Upon Her Window Pain: The Hope Of A Hopelessly Lost Love...

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

0 posted 2019-01-23 12:42 PM

Darkness laced with fog
surrounds the old, warped pier
The waning moon casts its pale glow
...as ghostly tendrils
Soggy, wintry air envelopes a solitary,
lotus leaf form

Loneliness, an old companion,
will visit her again
Slowly, she rows upon forgotten waters,
making her way toward the pier
The ebbing tides evoke no contentment,
only forlorn resentment

The pier will offer her no refuge
this cold, frigid night
Distant shores of fulfillment
are again beyond her reach
Sighing, she makes room
upon her heart for another

The oarlocks groan as if in great sorrow
with each struggling stroke
The fog-faded pier slips away once more,
consumed by the darkness
As does she, who fades away within it
only to return once more

...in the ‘morrow

...just bein' Bluesy

augustsky
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Posts 828
midwest US

1 posted 2019-01-23 01:19 AM

Bluesy, So haunting in its melancholy,
one can feel the Cold & the emptiness.

Excellent writing Poet..

Sky~

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

2 posted 2019-01-23 02:55 AM

Many thanks for your discerning comment, Miss Sky.

Much obliged...

...just bein' Bluesy

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2019-01-23 03:28 AM

Bluesy,

"Sighing, she makes room
upon her heart for another."

This line stands out in the darkness. ~L

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

4 posted 2019-01-23 04:04 AM

Yes, Miss Lori, every night in her visions and lamentations...

Much obliged, my dear.

...just bein' Bluesy

Poet In Pink
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Posts 1066
MI

5 posted 2019-01-25 03:31 PM

I see her and feel her in your wonderfully painted picture...I even relate to her. Awesome writing Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

6 posted 2019-01-26 01:42 AM

Your unique feel for my poem is greatly appreciated, Miss Pinky.

So many thanks.

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

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In The Mirror

7 posted 2019-01-26 01:44 AM

I also appreciate your comments, Miss Sky.

Much obliged!

...just bein' Bluesy

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