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Open Poetry #50

Winters Breath

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

0 posted 2018-12-29 09:41 PM

Winters Breath~

Listen..
Thoughts from her head,
Silently streaming,
Screaming blue..
Turbulent,
Peppered with Winter,
Cold dreams..
Faint flutter of snow-angel-wings,
Now heavy boots crunch snow,
Smother a new years poem,
Mittens left on the ground,
Crumpled empty woolen fists.

Yet red bird holds fast against Sting of Icy White,
Lights on a frozen twig,
Blinks a tiny eye
To the onslaught of January's Shove,

What a fearful fool is she..

© Augustsky

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2018-12-29 10:07 PM

Sky,
Lots of great lines in this one! The chill is unmistakable. ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2018-12-30 12:31 PM

Whoa!!! Tellin' it like it is, Sky. You absolutely did with this poem and I loved every word.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

3 posted 2018-12-30 11:16 PM

Thank you L. & JP, this was an oldie,
at the time someone was mocking me
while I was trying to write a new-yrs. Poem,
I took heed to the red bird who braved on through whatever January had to offer.

Thanks again for the read..

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

Bluesy Socrateaser
Member Elite

since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

4 posted 2018-12-31 12:15 PM

quote:
"Lights on a frozen twig,
Blinks a tiny eye"

I may have taken the two lines together out of context, Miss Sky,
but they're so fine together.

I'm a "fool" for lovely winter weather,
it's like a Haiku sandwich.
If I see my breath...I am.

I very much enjoyed your poetry.

...just bein' Bluesy

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

5 posted 2019-01-02 01:58 AM

Thank you for the sweet reply Bluesy,
and "Haiku sandwich"..Like that.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

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